Ice cream, Icecream we all Scream for Ice Cream!

We have been learning about persuasive writing in Room 14. Persuasive writing is a way to present an argument. The writer uses words to convince the reader of their opinion.

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A big smile from Ryleigh

WALT follow a persuasive writing model 

Success Criteria 

My persuasive writing must have:

  • A title

  • An opening sentence that states your opinion e.g.  I think... or I believe…

This sentence is a statement and does not contain ‘because’.

  • Three reasons that support your opinion using sequential language  e.g.

Firstly,...

Secondly,...

Thirdly,...

Each reason should be a sentence and the word because can be used to explain your reason.

  • A conclusion  (state your opinion again)

In Conclusion …

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Yum and yum from Tom and Zahn

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Sitting up really nicely waiting for our ice cream

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Sam making quick work of his vanilla ice cream

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Juno chose cookies and cream

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Ice cream celebrations are fun

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Good to the last bite

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Cookies and cream is my favourite

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Cookies and cream ice cream was the favourite

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Clara likes good old vanilla

We started our learning about persuasive writing by writing a text to convince others of the best flavour ice cream.  We celebrated our writing by having an ice cream treat of the flavours that had the best arguments. Here are some of our persuasive texts.

Cookies and Cream Ice Cream

I believe cookies and cream ice cream is the best ice cream in the whole entire universe.

Firstly, cookies and cream ice cream has the most flavour. 

Secondly, cookies and cream ice cream is the best because you can make cookie sauce.  

Thirdly, cookies and cream ice cream makes my taste buds have a party and have an ice cream fight celebration.  

In conclusion, I think everyone should eat cookies and cream ice cream.

By Declan 

Cookies and cream Ice cream

I believe cookies and cream ice cream is the best in the whole world. 

Firstly, cookies and cream is yummy and tasty.

Secondly, the taste is yummy and the taste stays there for a little while.

Thirdly, cookies and cream makes me go crazy.

I think everyone should have cookies and cream ice cream for pudding.

By Annabelle

Hokey Pokey Ice Cream

I believe hokey pokey ice cream is the best ice cream in the whole wide world.

Firstly, hokey pokey is my favourite because I like the flavour of it.

Secondly, hokey pokey makes my taste buds smile.

Thirdly, sometimes I have it after dinner.

It is the best ice cream ever.

By Clara

Vanilla Ice Cream

Vanilla ice cream is the best ice cream ever.

Firstly, vanilla ice cream goes with everything.

Secondly, it makes my taste buds go crazy.  

Thirdly, vanilla ice cream is the goodest.

In conclusion, everybody should eat vanilla ice cream.

By Te Pou

Caramel Ice Cream

I believe caramel ice cream is the best ice cream in the world. 

Firstly, caramel ice cream is the strongest flavoured ice cream in the entire universe. 

Secondly, caramel ice cream makes your taste buds party inside.

Thirdly, caramel ice cream goes with everything.

In conclusion, caramel ice cream makes my taste buds fly out of my mouth.

By Te Omeka

Vanilla Ice Cream

I believe vanilla ice cream is the best ice cream in the world.

Firstly, vanilla ice cream is the best ice cream because its flavour is so yum.

Secondly, vanilla ice cream is the best because it makes my taste buds have a party and dance.

Thirdly, vanilla ice cream is the best because is goes great with strawberries.

In conclusion, I believe vanilla ice cream in the best in the whole entire universe because it makes my taste buds smile.

By Juno

Goody Goody Gumdrops Ice Cream

I think goody goody gumdrops ice cream is the best in the universe.

Firstly, goody goody gumdrops ice cream is the best because it makes my taste buds have a party.

Secondly, goody goody gumdrops makes me go hypo. 

Thirdly, goody goody gumdrops has real lollies in it.

In conclusion, I think everyone should have it.

By Alyssa

Vanilla Ice Cream

I think vanilla ice cream is the best in the world.

Firstly, vanilla ice cream makes me happy.  

Secondly, vanilla ice cream is good for adding fudge sauce.

Thirdly, I love it.

In conclusion, vanilla ice cream is the best 

By Khobey

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Danika and her ice cream art work

Cookies and Cream Ice Cream

I believe that cookies and cream ice cream is the best in the entire world.

Firstly, cookies and cream makes my taste buds explode, it tastes like oreos, it is yum.

Secondly, the taste stays there for a little while.

Thirdly, it makes you get brain freeze.  I like it when I get brain freeze.

In conclusion I think cookies and cream ice cream is the best in the entire world.

By Danika  

Next Steps in Persuasive Writing

We have also been writing persuasive text about the best pet and the best toy.  We are noticing that our reasons or arguments need to get more meaty. By meaty we need our reasons to be stronger and we need to use because to explain why our reasons are important.  We are going to try and use keywords (developed with the teacher) to support us to write some more meaty reasons.

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Pania shares her ice cream art work

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Amber and her ice cream art work

Ice Cream Celebration 

All this writing about ice cream made us very hungry indeed.  We celebrated our learning about writing persuasive text by having an ice cream party.  Mrs Sprague judged our stories on who she thought had the best arguments. The winning ice cream flavours were: cookies and cream, goody goody gumdrops and vanilla.

Curriculum Links 

English Level 1   

Purpose and audiences

Recognise how to shape text for a purpose and an audience

Indicators:

  • Constructs text that demonstrate some awareness of purpose and audience through appropriate choice of content, language, and text form

  • Expects the texts they create to be understood, responded to, and appreciated by other

  • Is developing and conveying personal voice where appropriate

  • Ideas

Form and express on a range of topics.

Indicators:

  • Forms and expresses simple ideas and information, usually drawing from personal experience and knowledge

  • Begins to support ideas with some detail

Key Competencies

  • Using language, symbols and text

  • Thinking

  • Relating to others

Key Words

Persuasive writing, sequential language, argument, opinion

A big smile from Ryleigh